Sometimes strokes almost touch,
On the edge of my canvas, they sway,
Like shy colors, they ask for much,
But vanish when I try to obtain.
I chase them through my mixed paint,
In my palette, they play hide and seek,
Each stroke tells a story, without restraint,
Yet the perfect one remains meek.
I blend and dab, I layer and trace,
But art has its mysterious scheme,
Like fleeting visions in a sacred space,
They slip away, leaving me to dream.
I felt inspired to imitate Julia Alvarez’s “Sometimes the Words Are So Close” for my creative project. For my piece, “Sometimes the Strokes Are So Close”, I wanted to incorporate a series of her writing into mine. For instance, in the poem, Alvarez has a poem written in a first-person view, giving the readers insight into her thoughts, emotions, and experiences. Having a first-person view creates a sense of intimacy and can help the readers understand the struggles. I also enjoyed reading Alvarez’s work as I liked the creative aspect and understanding her thought process through her drafts.
I decided to take some of the aspects that I talked about above into my poem, except my poem explores the frustration that occurs in the creative process. As well as talking about the need to have the painting be so perfect and the idea that the “speaker” struggles with bringing their artistic vision to life. I decided to start the poem off by rewording Alvarez’s first line, “Sometimes the words are so close,” to “Sometimes strokes almost touch”. I noticed that the structure of Alvarez’s poem was free verse so I decided to stick with the same style, so the poem has less of a rhyming scheme and the lines vary with the length. Something else that I noticed within Alvarez’s writing was the self-discovery that she was learning and how she was trying to express herself. This is something that I felt was a key element within her writing and was something very personal yet private at the same time. To incorporate this into my writing I thought of what I felt passionate about and what is something that I’ve personally struggled with and that other people may or may not understand. Another significant piece of Alvarez’s writing that I noticed (and talked a bit about before) and incorporated into my poem was the use of personal pronouns as it creates a more personal relationship and bond.
“I chase them through my mixed paint, In my palette, they play hide and seek,” (Line 5-6), I incorporated the feeling of the palette playing hide and seek to create a more relevant or familiar experience to “chasing” ideas or inspiration. A lot of people are artists whether they acknowledge or realize it, for instance, writing this project! I personally always struggle to begin any sort of project whether that be for academics or just for fun, I felt that the overall topic would create something relatable for the audience. Additionally, I decided to adjust the wordplay as I felt that it was much needed especially when describing painting as there are different senses and imagery that occur. For instance, “shy colors” and “fleeting visions”. Painting is a universal activity that typically occurred when people were younger and the description of painting brings the memories of how simple and complicated it is. It ideally makes the audience feel some sort of deja vu as they remember their childhood.
Yue Wu-Jamison