“The Great Divide” took the W in my books

I feel as is all poems did a really good job at answering the prompt assigned. They somewhat took different approaches at doing so, but they made their stance clear. I enjoyed that the students that wrote this didn’t make it difficult to read, them being straight to the point helped out. They all also talk about the sonnet form and rhyme schemes so of course that adds on to their grade. I would give tropic “Tropic Shadows” a B+ because I like her ideas. A little more elaboration on quotes would’ve made the post better but, overall it was good. For “White Americaaaaaaaa” I would grade it a B-. This is due to the lack of textual evidence. Its a pretty solid post in regards to them setting up their focus for the post. I think they expressed themselves pretty well, but the textual evidence not being directly their somewhat confuses me. I think “The Great Divide” deserves an A-. I actually liked their way of explaining themselves. I honestly alway enjoy reading other students blog post because they seem to go really into depth and find things between the lines that I don’t understand when I read the poem myself. Out of all the poems, I would have to say that “The Great Divide” was the most persuasive and interesting.

to evaluate.

By: Jocelyn Lemus

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When we write, our minds are build upon differently allowing us to express our ideas and comparing it to others. Which to leads me to evaluating the three blog posts noted down:

Tropic Shadows: A-

White America: B-

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The Great Divided: B-

Even though every single person was capable of writing and evaluating the analysis of each of Claude McKay’s piece, they all hit that particulate criteria where they were super close to having everything jot down. I’ve noticed that everyone did an amazing and true effort of getting into the point and digging some of those ideas that just come out instantly. However, I must say that the blog post of Tropic Shadows certainly shaped the idea of everything that should be mentioned. This person was able to bring in particular ideas that were not that mentioned. There was so much detail that was able to be seen with an instant. For example, this person was able to use a well written and well structured blog posts that shaped it with the importance of McKay’s piece alone.

In addition, the reason I I gave the other two blog post a solid B or B minus was because they were able to correlate everything together from each of the and analysis of the McKay’s piece but they were also missing some criteria that allowed them to have a better grade. Don’t get me wrong all of these people did an amazing job and the blog post but I feel like they could’ve been having it a little bit more detail with new ideas they were not always straightforward to find I feel like they could’ve elaborated more they can make connections with the outside world. overall everyone did a good job as I was reading the blog post, but they could’ve been like a bit more of a detail and emphasis of what they were trying to say which will lead them to make a better and more understanding of the text.

Big brains write blog post for me (also writing blog to blog bout it)

Kevin Vargas

Kittsham’s Tropic Shadows blog contains very applicable real-world feelings that were captured. It identifies the two poems as separate emotional stages as opposed to viewing it as one collectible thesis. The emotion of isolation and limbo state of routine. The analysis on The Tropics of New York really does a great job introducing the idea of being trapped. However, it lacks an example on where this sense is felt. Fortunately, the analysis on “Subway Wind” tied the two together to give a greater insight on McKay’s flow of thought. If I dive into a reading deeply and I find myself hearing my thudding heart, then it deserves an A-.  

Dannyon13’s blog White Americaaaaaaa demonstrates an effort to dive deeper to demonstrate emotion beyond the poem but it can be more refined to greater potential. For example, in the last portion of the paragraph depicting the quotes that some African Americans had to face, there is heavy dehumanization of a race. Hurtful words such as “round us bark the mad and hungry dogs” and “making their mock at our accursed lot” are used as examples to retaliate stronger. Much like a war speech in a rebellion against a tyrant, there is a the list of the troubles followed by the negative prejudice and finalized by the final action to call. This call for action could be part of the thesis to rebel against racism and prejudice. However, there is still some valid points to reference the homesick portion of the poem. It raised my interest to a B. 

As for Marklipnickey’s The Great Divide blog had me lightly confused at first. I wasn’t sure where this idea of “anxiety” came from. You clarified within the blog through deeper analysis that there is seeking love but one can’t get it over itself. I wasn’t able to catch this on my read! A. 

TA for One Day

Sofia Garcia

All right lets get started on grading these blog posts. Based on the rubric, I gave “Tropic Shadows” an A+. I gave “White Americaaaaaaaa” and “The Great Divide” an A-. The blog post that was the most persuasive and original was “Tropic Shadows”.

Reflecting back to the debate from last class (November 20, 2019) the paper had what the judges and the questioner (me) wanted. It was essay length. That’s fine, but not exactly necessary for the blog post to be that long. The person had a thesis and they had evidence to support their thesis which included quotes from the poems that they cited along with their own overall effective analysis of the quotes that they used in their blog posts. The person also made a connection from the poems’ rhyme scheme to their interpretation of the poem. This alone made a difference between the winning team and the losing team of the debate. The conclusion the person summarizes their analysis which gives the reader closure.